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Butterfly moment

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stree Wed 10-Oct-18 18:56:38

I realise this will not bear scrutiny as a perfect use of language, never mind whatever rules apply to poetry, it is my way of remembering a summers evening calm and warm when a butterfly landed on my wrist and I found something profound and magical about it.
So I wrote it down.

Butterfly moment.

It was late in the day,
Neither an evening nor a daytime, but a rich bliss of both.
when the sun lit the underside of an evenings cloud,
with a still shimmering haze, sunset shone with silken rays.
and as the moon softly climbed the sky,
to offer its star jewelled shroud,
its trillion tonned echo alight with exquisite patience, and it became then that instant
that the smallest question ever asked, was "why?"

and as I sat gazing both at what lay without,
and saw what played and learned within,
I knew then, that it would begin:
and you alighted on my sleeve, with a folding and shimmering
in that last lights glimmering,
on what we both knew, was your first and only day.

We faced each other proud, silently being allowed, to truly see ourselves, in each a special way.
I breathed slow and slight, as that, your only day, turned to night
and the scent of the border flowers, of which you would only ever know one season
wrapped us, beguiled us, and lifted and measured us,
and I knew then, life was beyond knowing, and would never need reason

and you lifted and folded your Faberge and Michael Angelo,
precisely perfect Symphony, Set Your Self to fly, Wings.
and I began to see
To be what you must Be,
Your Life, Your self, Your perfect radiant wings..
I felt so small as you let me know that your day had been good,
a first and last unbroken.

The eloquence of I know not what, spoke between us, spoke of all.
We never broke gaze,
as you lifted from me, so quietly, and we knew it had ended, swept your dazzle to the sky
to that brightest last thing, that sunset, The last you would ever see of summer haze,
Then we, or at least I, felt a whole life sweep by.

That spell of us unspoken....
And we had done more,
I was sure, than could be measured.
On that first yet the last of our time.
and I sat silent.
without words...

...........as a blackbird chattered at the stars, scolded the dusk,
and claimed the ancient rites.

bernice28 Wed 24-Oct-18 13:54:19

you have painted a beautiful picture for me thank you

paddyann Wed 24-Oct-18 14:20:00

Buttterflies are the souls of the dead,itswhat my GM used to say.When a friends daughter was dying she said she would come back as a butterfly at the least expected time and place.She was buried in January ,a snowy day and a butterfly folowed her coffin down the aisle.When her parents took her children on holiday in February there was abutterfly in the plane before takeoff ..so still a very cold Scotland .Whether you believe or not ,it brought them a lot of comfort to think their mum was keeping an eye on them .Maybe it was someone you know saying hello .

mcem Wed 24-Oct-18 14:35:48

Beautiful. Thank you.

Buffybee Wed 24-Oct-18 17:47:52

Beautiful poem stree, I could practically feel that early dusk and the magic of the butterfly.

stree Wed 24-Oct-18 22:03:10

Aw thank you all.

You all posted at once, I thought nobody liked it.
I know its a bit of an over egged pudding word wise, but I used the words I wanted to and felt best for me, to say what I said.......
Thank you again .. for seeing what I tried to paint.
and strangely enough, a butterfly was hovering at the bedroom window as I opened the blind this morning.