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Limericks with very strict rules ..... 88558

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MissTree Sun 02-Aug-20 10:31:18

Some of the limericks on the Gransnet threads are really good and worthy of publication I think .
Some don’t keep to the rules. I know games are for enjoyment and it’s all about the taking part but I wondered if anyone else would feel like me ? Could we have a thread of limericks which stick to the 88558 syllable rules ?
I hope it’s not out of order to suggest this. What do gamesters think? AIBU ?

Illte Sun 02-Aug-20 10:40:58

Isnt it 99559?

There was a young lady from Riga..

Just interested. Willing to be corrected.

lovebeigecardigans1955 Sun 02-Aug-20 10:50:25

Sounds good, Illte but I don't mind if they're something like 9, 9, 6, 6, 9 or 10, 10, 5, 5, 10 as they still keep their basic rhythm.

There was a young lady from Riga
Whose diet was terribly meagre

Juliet27 Sun 02-Aug-20 10:51:49

I agree Miss Tree. Difficult sometimes to keep to the rhythm but yes, I agree it’s 88558 according to the following which I googled...

‘Limericks all follow the same structure and pattern which sets them apart from other poetic forms and makes them easily identifiable.

A limerick consists of five lines arranged in one stanza.
The first line, second line, and fifth lines end in rhyming words.
The third and fourth lines must rhyme.
The rhythm of a limerick is anapestic, which means two unstressed syllables are followed by a third stressed syllable.
The first, second, and final line each have three anapests—da dum da da dum da da dum.
The third and fourth lines have two anapests-—da dum da da dum.‘

Juliet27 Sun 02-Aug-20 10:53:03

There was a young lady from Riga
Whose diet was terribly meagre
She grew far too thin

Annum Sun 02-Aug-20 11:03:51

Maybe we’re just sticklers for convention but I agree with you “MissTree”. It’s also much more of a challenge - good for those little grey cells!

Annum Sun 02-Aug-20 11:04:29

There was a young lady from Riga
Whose diet was terribly meagre
She grew far too thin
From toes to her chin

Illte Sun 02-Aug-20 11:05:43

Ah, I see. I've been putting an extra dum in?

Juliet27 Sun 02-Aug-20 11:30:46

We’ve all overdone ‘dum’ at times ?

Annum Sun 02-Aug-20 11:40:58

I wonder if we have to be quite so exact Illte.
This is Edward Lear’s limerick no.91 from a book, which has differing numbers of syllables but still has a good rhythm when read aloud:

There was a Young Lady of Russia,
Who screamed so that no one could hush her;
Her screams were extreme,
No one heard such a scream,
As was screamed by that lady of Russia.

I’m sure gransnetters can do even better!

May7 Sun 02-Aug-20 11:43:10

There was a young lady from Riga
Whose diet was terribly meagre
She grew far too thin
From toes to her chin
Her friends could not even see her
Ta da

MissTree Sun 02-Aug-20 13:01:13

Love it ! ???
Any publishers out there ?
I try to do mine with Humpty Dumpty in mind.
I might be just a bit too picky ?

Annum Sun 02-Aug-20 13:24:18

Are you going to start the next one May7?

May7 Sun 02-Aug-20 14:05:49

Here goes

The graveyard was dark and eerie

Bathsheba Sun 02-Aug-20 14:58:49

That would fit the rhythm better if it was ‘the graveyard was eerie and dark’

MissTree Sun 02-Aug-20 16:05:53

Ok Bathsheba, let’s go with yours .

The graveyard was eerie and dark
The lads went out for a lark

Bathsheba Sun 02-Aug-20 16:37:24

The graveyard was eerie and dark
The lads went out for a lark
They saw a weird shape

Annum Sun 02-Aug-20 16:42:30

The graveyard was eerie and dark
The lads went out for a lark
They saw a weird shape
A floating black cape

MissTree Sun 02-Aug-20 16:50:04

The graveyard was eerie and dark
The lads went out for a lark
They saw a weird shape
Dressed in a black cape

Ninarosa Sun 02-Aug-20 16:55:31

The graveyard was eerie and dark
The lads went out for a lark
They saw a weird shape
Dressed in a black cape
Then Rover let out a loud bark!

Ninarosa Sun 02-Aug-20 17:05:48

I know it's not wise to eat sugar

MissTree Sun 02-Aug-20 17:09:53

Snap , Annum. Floating is better though. ?

Annum Sun 02-Aug-20 17:11:35

Actually I preferred yours MissTree!

MissTree Sun 02-Aug-20 17:13:53

Ninarosa - is that 9 syllables ?
Would you like to eat sweets instead ? Or ?

MissTree Sun 02-Aug-20 17:14:56

Annum ☺️

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