Gransnet forums

Work/volunteering

Just in case! ........

(14 Posts)
Anne58 Tue 28-Jan-14 17:11:00

Before I received the call from the fishing holiday chap, I had been sending out some emails on "spec" to a few local companies. Please see below. Let me know what you think, obviously I can adapt them to show some enthusiasm for the type of company (I have always been very interested in concrete products / nosing around other peoples houses / steel fabrication / wholesale ironmongery/ pet cemetery services

Good morning,

I hope you will not mind my contacting you "on spec" but following redundancy I am exploring all avenues to get back to work.

I am looking primarily for office/administration positions, but have also worked in sales, marketing and customer service. I have many years experience of using Microsoft Office (Word, Excel and PowerPoint) and a range of CRM systems.

I employ effective time management and prioritise tasks to maximise efficiency. I have a good eye for detail as I do occasional work as a freelance proof reader. I take care to show courtesy, loyalty and professionalism at all times, and ensure that clients and colleagues feel respected and valued.

I have attached my CV. Please do not hesitate to get in touch if you would like any further information.

Kind regards, and lots of love and kisses.

Phoenix.

Galen Tue 28-Jan-14 17:19:13

Would leave out love and kisses!

Anne58 Tue 28-Jan-14 17:20:22

grin I thought that was the best bit! wink

Ana Tue 28-Jan-14 17:22:35

And me, phoenix! grin

Not sure about the 'Good morning', though, but that might just be me...

Nonu Tue 28-Jan-14 17:23:23

Reading that , I would hire you right now !

However, and there always is one of those floating about , I would NOT add hugs and kisses .

Anne58 Tue 28-Jan-14 17:26:45

Oh, go on, go on, go on! (Mrs Doyle moment!) hugs and kisses are a good thing !!! grin

Ana what could I put instead of "Good morning" ? I suppose it would have to be "Dear Sir or Madam" ????

Ana Tue 28-Jan-14 17:39:13

I don't know - it's just that it might not be morning by the time they read it! Dear Sir or Madam does sound rather too formal, I admit. Any ideas, anyone?

Anne58 Tue 28-Jan-14 17:54:31

Ana, It is a bit tough, isn't it? "Hi" is definitely out, as you say the Sir/Madam bit is a bit too formal. "To whom it may concern!" is also far too starchy!

I think that other phrases such as "Oy, you" or "Yo Bro" might not be appropriate. I did sort of "toy" with "Hey Dude" but felt in the end it was sadly not suitable.

Iam64 Tue 28-Jan-14 17:56:52

I think that tailoring the greetings to the individual firms would proably be a Good Thing - keep on going phoenix

merlotgran Tue 28-Jan-14 17:57:09

Dear Sir, stroke Madam, is a little suggestive formal I think. grin

I fear it won't be long before all business letters begin with, Hi Guys angry

I received a business e-mail yesterday which began quite formally with Dear Mrs....... and then went on to tell me the reason for the communication was to give me a heads up! They obviously assumed I would know what they were talking about. hmm

jinglbellsfrocks Tue 28-Jan-14 18:10:18

I would employ you if it was me. Especially with the "love and kisses" wink

(wish I bloody could! sad

You could just start with 'hello'.

grannyactivist Tue 28-Jan-14 20:23:37

When my son wrote 'on spec' he made sure he found out the name of the person his letter should be addressed to and then he showed them that he'd 'done his homework' about the company. Instead of talking about what he was looking for he angled his pitch to ensure that he met the criteria he supposed the company was looking for: e.g.
There are a number of things about * as a company which have particular appeal to me: the values that * espouse are also ones that I aspire to and as an owner-managed business I believe that * will offer me a career pathway that will focus on the provision of exemplary service to clients (as evidenced by your Quality Survey) and therefore the company will want to invest in me as a person in order that I will be trained to the highest possible standard; thereby meeting the needs of the firm’s clients and also fulfilling my ambition to develop my career in a company which is committed to continuous improvement. For my part I will bring enthusiasm, a commitment to excellence and a determination to represent the firm to the best of my ability at all times.
Hoping you'll get the job on Friday and won't need this advice. grin

Anne58 Tue 28-Jan-14 22:38:17

grannyactivist very good advice, I thank you (and your son!)

rosesarered Fri 07-Feb-14 10:22:21

I don't think Dear Sir or Madam is too formal if you can't find out the name of the person[though as Grannyactivist says it's a good idea and shows you have done your homework.] An 'on spec' letter shouldn't contain bullshit though so don't go overboard, a modest but confident attitude would be looked on more favourably, outlining your abilities.If all else fails end it with 'please, please, I'm on my knees and begging you!!!!' Joke. Just like your love and kisses was also a joke.smile